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I have some things to say
Before you slip away
You try to guard your heart
Because your awful part
I feel your pain
But don't let it make you lame
I say this not as a friend
Nor with advise to lend
I observe with a deeper feeling
One very more sealing
So ill look and be near
But i will fear
You will never love me
But we will wait and see
I like a girl that had a bad part in her last relationship...and by lame i mean she cant do anything like she is lame like crippled not lame as a negative.
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JokerrLaughs Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This poem is really sweet and meaningful, and I love the way it was constructed. :)
Hope it all works out, for both of you.
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Nba76 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2012
Good job, and I felt like that once. Didn't turn out for the best but I learned something from it.

I just hope you get the best of it and be happy.

:)
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Van-Dunkelschreiber Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
sounds like a slippery sloap hope it works out
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olgolugo Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice job!!! :love:
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heavenlytouch Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This poem is so powerful ! Maybe the lines are short and the syllables are simple, but it creates a vivid description in my mind. Good job and keep writing ! :)
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ManiacOfPokemon Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012  Student General Artist
I like this poemand the picture for it as well :'D
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Pinkbozo Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012  Student Writer
I like your poem.. sad.. But I like it all the same.


I didn't read through all the comments... But all I have to say is:
She may not have fallen for you yet.. But don't give up..
Think of it this way (as childish and cheesey as this is) Yeah gotta fight a few more dragons/monsters... then ya get the princess.
I may be young, but a positive out look has always worked for me..
Keep smiling, hun
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CreamCheeseGummyBear Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
-flails- That, was epic. o_o It's all so true. Could I put it on my profile on another site? Crediting you, of course. xP
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zenzero541 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012  Student Writer
yes you may :)
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CreamCheeseGummyBear Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
^.^ Thanks.
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